Added: Jun 8, 2011
From: iwubbjoejonas
Duration: 0:27
I was 18 when it happened, my life was great. I had friends, the best boyfriend a girl could ask for. But what happened? I met this guy named Robert, though he wasn't quit human. I could sense something different in him, that's what drew mw to him in the first place. We were in a party and by us I meant my friend Stella and I. he was there also but I didn't know it back then. The party was out of control we were outside the house and we could here the music playing. The music was so aloud that we had to scream so people could hear us. People dancing in the furniture, People were kissing in the corners. And I could have sworn I saw two people going to a bed room in the second floor, the floor was full of papers, cups, spoons, plates, you name it and it was there. Everyone was playing truth of dare, and that's when I saw him sitting by himself, Stella saw me staring at him and She said "oh no you don't, you have a boyfriend already remember? Beside you would be wasting your time. He doesn't know anyone, his new in our school he came here last month. He doesn't talk to anyone every time you try talking to him he act as if you invisible." I would understand why people would do that to Stella between you and me she can be a bit of a talkative person, it's a bit annoying sometimes, Stella she my best friend, she has curly long blond hair, her eyes are as blue as the sky, she very white. "That's because he hasn't meet me yet." I said. "Just be careful we don't want rumors around that you're cheating on your boyfriend." She said". "Don't worries ill be fine." I said. "Whatever." She said. And I leave her to talk to some guys. He was sitting on a chair with his head down looking at his hands between his legs. He has sandy hair. He looked like he worked out a lot he was buff. I couldn't see his eyes so I can't tell you what color they were. But just then when I was approaching he looked up and the first thing I notice were his eyes they were black as the night. "Um hi my name is Bianca, I hear your new here I just wanted to introduce my self you seen bored so." I said. "Hi my name is Robert." He said. His voice was deep but at the same time it was soft like I could feel a mist. "So what are you doing here?" I ask. "You don't look like you belong here." I said. I don't know but something told me he doesn't. "I guess I was hoping to meet someone." He said. "Oh really and did u? I rather thought that u you were a bit of a shy person." (He laughs) "I am shy but I thought it was time for me to get out of the. how do you say? Come out of the box." "Bianca!!" I know that voice anywhere. Ugh did she have to be so rude? "Um I have to go now but it was nice talking/meeting you." I said "Same here" He said. As he stare at me mysteriously. "Maybe I'll see you at school tomorrow." I said. "Maybe you will." He said. Intensive eyes. And I left to go look for Stella. THERE MORE TO COME BUT FIRST I WANT TO SEE WHAT DO YOU THINK SO FAR?? 3 COMMENTS FOR THE NEXT ONE: D
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iwubbjoejonas Says:
Jun 9, 2011 - thats mean this is my first story i think i actually did a good job on it ... and i knoiw it has some mistakes but im only in middle school ...
DanceSeejDance Says:
Jun 9, 2011 - When I was in middle school, I wrote better than this.
iwubbjoejonas Says:
Jun 10, 2011 - oh well,, but i think i fix it .. can u have a look and tell me if it still has some mistakes?
. . . . . . . because these video appear directly from youtube.com which we cannot control it.)
DanceSeejDance Says:
Jun 8, 2011 - This is horrible. You need to learn proper spelling, grammar, and punctuation. You also switch between present- and past-tense too often. It's just all-around... awful.